Submitted by cjsteven on Tue, 03/10/2009 - 15:59
Here is our rough draft. It isn't that much and it is a work in progress.
When reviewing what we have done please consider the following:
- Visuals
- Content
- Layout
- Information you feel should be included that isn't
This is a work in progress....please keep that in mind.
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I wanted to comment on the visuals but I didn't catch any. The content is well written and flows nicely. The layout seemed a bit off. There were numerous paragraphs with titles that only consisted of one or two sentences. Combining the sentences or omitting them all together would look much better. As I said before the information is well written.
First off I assume you know that your formatting is different on each page, of course everything needs to look uniform. As far as headings go for subjects, if the content is only a couple lines it does not deserve its own heading. Also try to avoid using the word a lot or lots, many or numerous sounds much more professional. Another word that should be avoided is the use of "you" because your paper is written for many different audiences. So far I think the content is good you just have some more work to do.